約定自己每週寫一篇獨立寫作，然後麻煩大學的英文老師幫忙更改。

太感謝我的英文老師居然會答應我每週幫我更改我的作文，我會好好努力的。

作文題目

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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檢討問題：

1. 在第一段敘述三個reasons時，請把三個理由的優點寫出來，而非ex:學生需要leisure time, a wide of knowledge 這種。

2. 第二段，開頭確實是敘述學生有的leisure time 能有哪些優點(這種敘述學生需要休閒時間要擺在反駁論點的開頭而非當作標題擺在理由)

3. 代換字，寫作時盡量運用「名詞」代替「動詞夾帶一堆字」，ex: the exam of preparing 改成 preparation of exam. / improve the ability of study 改成 improve their concentration.

4. 盡量用一句一主詞＋一例子，一句一主詞＋一例子而不要一句話夾在兩句話，ex: For example, I will distribute time which I need to study academically knowledge or which I need to do some sports to help me throw out the stress during the exam of preparing. 改成 For example, I will distribute my time to sport while I need to study academic knowledge. Sports can  help me throw out the stress during the preparation of exam. (看起來要少用which/多試試看while)

5. 複合名詞或者形容詞＋名詞 ex: solve ability，這邊的solve是動詞，必須要改形容詞或者名詞去結合後面的名詞，改成 solving ability.

6. 一句話不太能有兩個動詞，後面可能就要加to，或者第二個用動詞分詞(V+ing)

7. 省略主詞，前面句子的動詞要ing ex: When talking with my friends, I obtain…. 不然就要改成 When I talk to my friends, I obtain….

8. 代換詞: free time = leisure time, focus = concentrate/concentration,

9. 寫example 得到優點舉兩個就好 ex: 參加了＿＿＿活動，獲得了/幫助自己(1)and (2)

10. 強調精準不求多，不需要一些贅字。

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